Tuesday, November 10, 2009
New York
I went to New York City in 2004 and 2006 and they were the best trips of my life. Both times I went was for missions. I believe the city of New York can either be horrible to people or magical. New York has many negitives as well as positives but when I'm there I only see the positives. It's not like I spent my time only in Manhatten, I spent most of my time in Queens, Broklyn, and Harlem. It was so wonderful to help people who were in need by just passing out PB&J sandwiches or handing out soup and juice. I loved just listening to their stories.
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Grade: 7/10
• This sentence isn't clear. What is "for missions"? Both times I went was for missions.
• Missing comma after positives.
• Negatives is misspelled.
• Brooklyn is misspelled.
• Run-on sentence: It's not like I spent my time only in Manhatten, I spent most of my time in Queens, Broklyn, and Harlem.
• Spell out all acronyms (peanut butter and jelly)
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It is really interesting to listen to people. There are so many people in a city like New York, people of different ethnic groups and religions, all so diverse and fascinating. It's great that you could help out some of those people.
It make life more livable when you know that you've helped someone in a tough time. To extent yourself to that length of passing out food and spending your time helping others will come back to you in a positive way.
I have always wanted to go to New York. It seems like such an interesting and exciting place to visit. I hope I am able to experience it someday.
I have been to New York also. It is a crazy place. I was staying in Manhattan, but it was much different than I expected.
I've lived near new york city for the last year and it really is such an amazing place to experience.
I do not like Harlem though, it's a very scary place.
Oh, and it's spelled Manhattan ;)
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