Monday, October 26, 2009
Project Schully
A match made in cyberspace. Lori Schulweis is a producer and coordinator on "Live With Regis and Kelly" and won a weight loss contest the staff was having. She then realized that she wanted to get married. So Regis did an episode on her and 5 bachelors called and went on a second date with one who then dumped her. Her grandma told her to go online and that is where she found the love of her life, David Buder. -VINCENT M. MALLOZZI, NY Times-
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3 comments:
This is really funny in a way, and I love regis and Kelly! Great show and great post!
I see opportunities to make this tighter. Sentence #2 could be split into two sentences. In sentence #4, spell out “5,” because it's less than 10. Also, NY Times should be written, The New York Times. Lashaya, your summary caught my attention, because it came from a cool story. I also liked your blog heading, “Project Schully.” Wow, if I wanted to get married, I’d be very afraid to look online, even if I was a producer of a TV show. Because, it’s a jungle out there in cyberspace.
Grade: 8.5/10
Mistakes:
• The first sentence is only a fragment and not a complete sentence.
• Should be five
• Run-on sentence should have been divided up: "So Regis did an episode on her and 5 bachelors called and went on a second date with one who then dumped her."
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