I feel like everyone has such interesting stories and I have nothing but I would say my 3 most noteworthy news experiences are; the time my best friends brother went to Iraq, When I got married, and when I went to New York.
First, I have a best friend and she has a huge family that I have always considered to be like mine. I have know her family since 5th grade. I don't have any brothers so I consider her four brothers my brothers. In her family the parents have a rule that when you turn 18 you have to be going to school, have a job, join the military, or you have to move out. One of the brothers joined the navy and the other joined the army. The brother that joined the navy came home on medical discharge but as for the other brother I was over when "Mom" got the call. He had to go over seas. We all just sat there in silence, which was very rare for a house filled with 6 kids, but there we sat. Finally the youngest brother broke the ice by burping which made everyone laugh. We were on egg shells for that year he was in Iraq, I had never watched the news so much in my life. He came home safely but with horror stories and he was defiantly not the same person but he was home...
Second, I have always felt that news does not always have to be bad new and that the newspapers are filled with to much bad and not enough good but the good is in there somewhere and I personally love to read the wedding announcements. When my husband and I announced to our families that we were engaged it was not pretty. Both of our families thought we were too young to get married. My family understood that we loved each other and they tried to be supportive right away. His family on the other had tried to talk us out of it every chance they could. In the end, they are now supportive and think we did the right thing.
Third, In 2007 I went to New York on a missions trip it was one of the best things that ever happened to me. We all helped so many people. One memory in particular was when we went to a nursing home and said hi to all the residents. This one lady was so happy to see us she kept us there for two hours and for those two hours we sang "Our God is an awesome God" over and over and all we knew was the chorus but to this lady that didn't matter. It was so awesome to know that this lady was so great full for our horrible singing.
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Hey! I loved the story about your "brother" having to go overseas. After this year of school, one of my best friends is joining the National Gaurd, which I am SO thankful for, because they can't ever make him go over there. He's one of those men that LOVES to talk about guns and tell stories about what he'd do to someone with a gun, you know, jokingly, so I fully expected him to want to join to army so he could go fight in Iraq. I was extremely relieved when he told me that wasn't the case! I wonder why so many people who don't want to go into the army don't just join the National Gaurd for a year or two after high school so they can't be forced into one where they might have to go overseas...
Grade: 5/10
Mistakes:
• Misspelled word
• Misuse of semi colon
• Spell out numbers below 10 (three, fifth)
• Plural was missed on the word news
• To used instead of too
• Several run-on sentences. Try writing shorter sentences that are easier for people to read. The general rule of thumb for journalists is to write to a fifth grade reading level.
PS - You might want to try typing your stories in a document on your computer, spell checking it and then posting it on your blog.
You had some really interesting stories. I am glad everyone who went over seas is safe. I sister should be going over soon. I am worried for her. Nice to meet you. Take care!
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